Lying next to you at night
Red brick wall between us
Driving in the car
A million things I wanna say
But I can’t share them
Won’t compete with the radio
When did I become,
Part of the scenery?
A piece of the furniture?
The background noise?
How did I become so obsolete?
I say your name so many times
Yet you don’t hear me
Too busy watching T.V
I call you on your cell phone
And all we do is argue
We used to talk for hours
When did I become,
Part of the scenery?
A piece of the furniture?
The background noise?
How did I become so obsolete?
What happened to us?
When did we fall
Out of the love we had,
Remember?
Instead of your arms
I fall to the floor when I’m crying
I never whisper your name anymore
Before I fall asleep
Just to hear it.
like yesterdays news
How did I become so obsolete?
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To quote myself;
“…I think things just drift
Like that’s life
Tough shit
Put in a hard shift and maybe it’ll stick together longer
But who’s stronger after all?
The one who never tried
Because he never lied
And if he ever died he was ready
Only way his hands would steady
In the direction he’s heading
Please believe when I say
I don’t want to go that way
And save me now through countless rows
When I’m down and out and trouble bound…”
and Bob Marley
“Truth is, everybody is going to hurt you; you just gotta find the ones worth suffering for.”
ugh, man this pulled at my heart. so raw and devastating. i’ve definetly been there a time or two.
This is a good poem, yes. You have a way with words and you craft your work so it sits well on the page. I love that you repeat verse two – I’m a sucker for repetition and full-on refrain really does it for me. But why not write it out properly instead of just putting ‘(Repeat verse 2)’ in there? That refrain/chorus contains some nice rhyme and rhythm..
I also like this bit:
When did we fall
Out of the love we had,
Remember?
Instead of your arms
I fall to the floor when I’m crying
I never whisper your name anymore
fall, fall, floor/anymore… gracias
Luke
LUKE!! you’re so right that second verse thing has bugged the shit out of me and i procrastinated, thankyou. (it has now been altered
) perhaps you could come by my house and comment on my laundry so that i may also attend to that, just a thought.
I appreciate your comment, glad it “does it” for you
Cat
If I knew where you lived I’d be glad to do your laundry
Thanks for the visit, and in particular the vote of solidarity I felt when I read your comment on the ‘About Luke’ page… you know where I been, suga.
Sometimes seems
This life’s a big thing
I can’t shake off easily
It’s gonna be the death of me
I won’t get out alive,
I tried
I cried….
I just realised it’s all about acceptance and trust. Onwards and upwards we ride…
If you’re on Facebook check out the Poetry Circle I run, the link’s on my blogroll
Warmest Salad
Luke
I live in Canada now, you live in England right? (too far to do my laundry?)
I grew up there mainly the north (yorkshire, lancashire) I’m glad you were feeling the solidarity too, I knew where you bin the first few lines of your ‘about’
“Sometimes seems
This life’s a big thing
I can’t shake off easily
It’s gonna be the death of me
I won’t get out alive,
I tried
I cried….
I just realised it’s all about acceptance and trust. Onwards and upwards we ride…”
Oh, Yeah! Acceptance, Trust AND Survival.
Love warm salad
Cat
http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/05/25/brian-and-tara-miller-u-rock-14th-anniversary-celebration-post/
please visit Brian to wish his 14th marriage annivesary.
Thanks a lot!